Oh... This hits hard.
I'd say, though, the moment of contact between the ghost and her loved one was not necessary. It does not actually add anything significant to the plot but kicks the reader out of observer's POV. To my taste it's understandable that she tried to do it, but maybe making it as fruitless as previous attempts would make a better sort of tension through her despair and reader being anxious whether the guy will make it through.
Also, at some point the characters felt a bit too exaggerated, but it does not spoil the experience.
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